Tuesday, November 10, 2009

That's all about the change when as the Aquarium launches; should reflect the Arctic original of belugas; The aquarium's other three Belugas

-- "Time to name that baby beluga" in Vancouver 24 hours on November 9, 2009

Considering this is the only article a reader can actually read on the front page of the yesterday's 24 hours, it sure does contain a lot of errors. The image above captures the articles second, third, and fourth paragraphs. By the way, you may notice that each paragraph has only one sentence. The first paragraph also has just one sentence. The article contains six paragraphs - all six paragraphs are one sentence in length. The front page of Vancouver 24 hours - where journalism goes to die. One would think that it'd be easy to write an error-free six-sentence article. 24 hours makes it look damn hard, if not impossible.

In the first sentence/paragraph above, perhaps the first the should be changed to to and when jettisoned: That's all about to change as the aquarium launches. I've put a lowercase A for the start of aquarium, as that's how it is in the fourth sentence/paragraph (third one above), which is correct. In the third paragraph (middle one above), I'm guessing that original should be origins. In the same sentence/paragraph, there is beluga and belugas, but then in the subsequent sentence/paragraph, Belugas is suddenly capitalized. So many errors/inconsistencies in one simple six-sentence front-page article.

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