Wednesday, September 23, 2009

Hank Sedni; Kesler is the second coming of Rod Brind'amour with a potenially bigger offensive upside.

-- "Spill your guts" in Vancouver 24 hours on September 23, 2009

When you're spilling your guts, it's bound to be messy. But the least you can do is attempt to minimize the mess. Here we have Hank's last name being mangled from Sedin to Sedni. Then, in just one sentence of average length, we have Kesler missing his first name (this is his first mention in the article), Brind'Amour's last name missing a capitalization, and a T missing in what's supposed to be potentially. Yuck, there was obviously no attempt at all to minimize the mess here, and that's offensive to readers.

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