Wednesday, August 5, 2009

bloodshed began in Rexdale around 6:30 p.m.; an 17-year-old man; A 18-year-old boy; first shooting of the night occurred around 4:45 p.m

-- "Bloody Tuesday in T.O." on Vancouver 24 hours online on August 5, 2009

The article's second sentence begins by stating that the bloodshed began around 6:30 p.m. Remember that. Meanwhile, "an 17-year-old" should be "a 17-year-old" and "a 18-year-old" should be "an 18-year-old" - seventeen does not begin with a vowel sound, while eighteen does. "Downtown" should not be capitalized. In what journalistic guidebook is a 17-year-old a man while an 18-year-old is a boy? Maybe it depends on whether the individual is a victim or a suspect. Remember how the bloodshed apparently began around 6:30 p.m.? Well, the article's penultimate sentence states that the first shooting occurred around 4:45 p.m. My favorite part of this article is that it has two writers' names attached. "I wrote the parts that don't have any errors." "My share of the writing is the share that's error-free."

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